Peer Editing Worksheet 7

Compare and Contrast Essay

From Writing Academic English, A. Oshima and A. Hogue, Pearson Longman, 2006. p. 328

Writer's name__Elena Luise_________

Editor's name___Eylül Kilsedar___

1. What kind of introduction does this essay have? (funnel, dramatic, interesting surprising, statistical, factual, historical, etc.) ___________funnel____________

How many sentences does it contain? ________6_____________

Does it capture your interest? _________yes______________

Where is the thesis statement placed? ________nowhere___________________

Does the essay use block or point-by-point organization? point-by-point organization

If it uses block organization, is there a transition sentence or transition paragragh between the two blocks?

2. How many paragraphs are there in the body? Number __4____

The topics of the body paragraphs are as follows:

1.       The comparison of  primary, secondary and high schools in Italy and Turkey

2.       Differences in high schools in detail

3.       The comparison of  the Italian and the Turkish university system

4.       The exams that Turkish pupils have after primary schools and high schools

3. What kind of supporting details does the writer use in each body paragraph?

(make a short list for each paragraph)

1.- exams after primary, secondary and high school

2.- kinds of high schools

3.- bachelor degree, Erasmus program, english learning in university, being away from home while attending a university in Turkey

4.-the exams that guide career of Turkish pupils

4. Check each paragraph for unity. Is any sentence 'off the topic'? _Yes________

If your answer is yes, write a comment about it (them). _This involvement partly proves their cultural openness and their wish of integration, despite the criticisms by some European countries towards Turkish policy._____-____This sentence is writer’s comment and not relevant to the main idea__________________

5. Check each paragraph for coherence. Does each one flow smoothly from beginning to end?___Yes______

Which key nouns are repeated? ______differences, similarities_________________

What transitions signals can you find? ___in addition, in contrast, first of all…____________________

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6.What expressions does the writer use to link paragraphs? If there is none, write none! (If there are fewer paragraphs delete the lines.)

To introduce the first body paragraph.__First of all___________________

Between paragraphs 2 and 3 ______none_________________

Between paragraphs 3 and 4 _______another area of comparison______________

Between paragraphs 4 and 5 _________none______________

To introduce the conclusion ________to sum up________

7. What kind of conclusion does this essay have - a summary of main points or a paraphrase of the thesis statement? ___a summary of main points ____________________

Does the writer make a final comment? _____yes__________________

What is it? __If we inform us better about this semi-unknown Euro-asiatic country, we can probably learn more about some other features Italy and Turkey share._____________________

Is this an effective ending you will remember? ________no_______________

8. In your opinion, what is the best feature of this essay? In other words, what is the writer's best writing skill? The language

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