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Contents and Organization
Does it do what it’s supposed to do? This would depend on whether or not there is an Introduction. If there isn't one, should there be one? Is there a table of contents?
The wikipage is still under construction, there's a small table of contents that needs to be updated and there's no introduction but the group is planning to do one...
Is there a comparison or are there conclusions?
There's a comparison only between the section "Buying a house or renting it" but no conclusion yet. There is also a sort of comparison between the choice of getting married or living together but we think it could be highlighted more effectively by using a title.
What do you like about it? (be specific)
We like the part referring to the choice between marriage or living together because it clearly lists the major points about this issue.
Is there cohesion?
Yes. The paragraphs follow a logical thread
Is it relatively easy to read? If not, what could the writer do to make it easier for the reader?
We think it is relatively easy to read. We don't like the choice about colors, especially in the paragraph about young adults in U.S and Italy. It's too red, but obviously this is a personal preference. What's more there seems not to be any criteria in the choice of the titles colors. Some are red, some blue, some black. Maybe you could use different colors for the titles intoducing the bibliography.
Is there balance and parallelism?
We can say that, apart from minor points, there is balance and parallelism. Maybe the paragraph about "young adults in Italy" is not as long as "young adults in U.S".
Is referencing done correctly?
We don't know if references are to be provided after each section of the page or at the end of the page. However, they are complete.
Are there parts that appear that they should be referenced, but are not?
No
Can you find any instances of plagiarism?
No
Are there enough links to outside sources?
There are not many links to outside sources, apart from the bibliography. What's more the first two links in the table at the beginning don't work.
Length - are the paragraphs too long? too wordy?
We think that the paragraph about young adults in U.S is really too long.
Structure - is there a clear structure divided into paragraphs?
Maybe some titles could be highlighted better, to make the paragraphs division more clear. In some cases there is too much space between a title and its paragraph, in others titles and paragraphs are tto close. However this could be due to the editing process which is sometimes a little difficult
Is there any use of multimedia?
Apart from the pie chart there aren't multimedia elements.
Language
Are there sentence fragments or any run-on sentences?
The paragraph next to the pie chart needs to be completed. The rest of the sentences are complete
Are the verb tenses used correctly?
We think that verb tenses are used correctly
Are there words that need to be checked for spelling?
We only noticed a typing mistake in the paragraph "An overview of costs", in the first line (coul dcome)
Are the beginning of sentences and proper nouns capitalized?
Yes they are
Do sentences have appropriate ending punctuation?
Yes they have
Is internal punctuation (comma, colon, semicolon) used appropriately?
We think so
Are pronouns used correctly?
Yes
Is the appropriate vocabulary used?
Yes
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