Dear group 1,

 

First of all, you should add a table of contents and a brief introduction of the topic you're dealing with and the general purpose of your project. You should also add a comparison and/or a conclusion to clarify the results of your research (We noticed also that your project is not complete that's why you couldn't probably write your conclusion; something is still missing in the Italian part).

 

We really appreciated the photos and the graphs. The page looks eye-catching and attractive. The only thing we can suggest you is to use different colours for titles, key-words and subtitles and avoid different fonts.

 

The text is cohesive and grammatically correct, and the vocabulary is appropriate. We only have some suggestions about punctuation and spelling (see them in the text). Overall, the text is easy to read, even though the Italian part concerning the facts about Italian political history is not so clear (we wrote you some tips to improve your work in the wiki page).

 

Given that your project is not complete, we cannot speak about parallelism and balance; anyway, we suggest you to pay attention to this aspect when you'll write the missing sections.

 

The referencing is done correctly and there's no plagiarism ;-) Perhaps, only one reference is missing, i.e. the source of the map about "Mason-Dixon Line".

 

As far as syntax is concerned there aren't too long sentences. Here are only two or three tips for you:

 

The issue that mostly divided North and South, and which was considered as the main reason of the Civil War, was slavery -- which was considered as the main reason of the Civil war as well.

 

Four more slave states, seceded and became part of the Confederation (don't put a comma between subject and verb)

 

All in all, we think that you have done a very good job so far :-)

 

 

 

 

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