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Does it do what it’s supposed to do? This would depend on whether or not there is an Introduction. If there isn't one, should there be one? Is there a table of contents?

 

Yes, it does.This piece of virtual paper is really well organized: the introduction clearly explains both the aim of the work and the main topic of each section…it’s very convincing; the table of contents is clear and detailed, as well.

 

 

 

Is there a comparison or are there conclusions? 

 

There are two explicit comparisons between the two countries: in the first one the group made a parallelism between the Italian and the American dead penalty history, while in the second one the group provides an interesting comparison between the two countries’ way of thinking.

 

 

What do you like about it? (be specific)

 

We really appreciated the text structure and the way it’s conceived: full of graphic representations the text seems to catch the reader’s attention letting him/her better understand the differences between the fifty American states; we definitely think it’s really exhaustive and full of details (probably sometimes little bit dreadful!)

 

 

Is there cohesion?

 

Without any doubts the text is cohesive: we found it’s probably the best one among our works; each section is rich in details and from the very beginning to the end the discourse follows a logical thread.

 

 

Is it relatively easy to read? If not, what could the writer do to make it easier for the reader?

 

Some paragraphs are not so easy to understand especially for non native speakers because of some lexical choices: we think that there’s a wide use of terms very closed to the legal field.

 

 

Is there balance and parallelism?

 

As we said in the previous revision we didn’t really understand what this question means. If it means “is there an appropriate comparison” the answer is surely positive because the whole text is based on an effective comparison.

 

 

Is referencing done correctly?

 

Yes, there are references and they are well done even if we think the group should work a little more on this. We mean, considering that sometimes paragraphs are too long  more references can improve the text making it more reliable and complete.

 

 

Are there parts that appear that they should be referenced, but are not?

 

There’s a lack of references in the Italian part but probably just because it has to be completed by the American peer.

 

 

Can you find any instances of plagiarism?

 

As we said above, sometimes the language used is too complicated but we don’t think it’s necessarily plagiarism…probably there are some quotations which are not pointed out  by the use of  quotation marks.

 

 

Are there enough links to outside sources?

 

Probably we misunderstood the question above because we’ve already written about references! ; )

 

 

Length - are the paragraphs too long? too wordy? The length of the paragraph seems to be perfect, every aspect of the topic is explained very well. Maybe the part dedicated to the opinions is too long.

 

Structure - is there a clear structure divided into paragraphs? Be careful with the title because it is not clear which are the main titles and which are subtitles.

 

Is there any use of multimedia? Yes, there are two videos from YouTube. Maybe one or two inside the text would be good, but this way is perfect.

 

 

Are there sentence fragments or any run-on sentences? No, almost all sentences are clear. We have written some suggestions inside the text.

Are the verb tenses used correctly? Yes

 

Are there words that need to be checked for spelling? Only punischment.

 

Are the beginning of sentences and proper nouns capitalized? Yes. Pay attention that sometimes at the beginning of a paragraph there's a space.

 

Do sentences have appropriate ending punctuation? Yes

 

Is internal punctuation (comma, colon, semicolon) used appropriately? Sometimes sentences are too long and with too much commas

 

Are pronouns used correctly? Yes

 

Is the appropriate vocabulary used? The vocabulary is appropriate and clear.

 

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