At the first look at the page we really liked the charts. They are very useful in order to have a clear idea of the situation in the varoius states and they summarize the contents in a visible and clearly way. We also liked the map of the USA and the table of contents because it helps the readers to know what they are going to read and they can choose to read the topics they are interested in. They respected the contents they wrote in the table of contents.
There is a good comparison between the situation and opinions in America and Italy, even though we think there are too many personal comments in the introduction of the comparison, maybe it is better to raise them and leave the page "impartial" and just present the situation. In our opinion the page is a bit too long and maybe it doesn't incourage people to read it.
What we suggest to our peers is to add the same number they wrote in the table of contents to the various parts in order to clarify the structure of the page and to distinguish better the topics. Another suggestion is to write the titles in capital letters and this way you don't need to use a different colour. You should also use a color for the main titles and another colour for all the subtitles and remember to use the same size and format. This way the page will be better organized.
There is balance and references are done. It seems there is no plagiarism even though there are specific and appropriate words, which are requested by the subject matter.
Words seem to be correctly spelled and sentences are not too long and complex. Punctuation seems to be used appropriately and sentences are well connected. Maybe they could use some more adverbs and connectors.
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